Your ideas on my story please, thank you?

OK first This is very jumbled BUT i think I see partially where yer going with this but your missing key parts and some of the ideas dont make alot of sense... In every story has in its beginning a birth or change of some sort it can be emotional or phsyical but it should be diffrent from every other of its kind... IE a common theme for vampires that are changed to make them diffrent the writers have them hate or refuse to drink human blood... or in blades case he was born as a half vampire thing... you NEED a diffrence.... Also Luke seems to be your main char ignore all that stuff with johnny and sam etc that is part of yer back story yes but the STORY should start with Luke... what was he before being changed? Why did Johnny choose Luke? random vamp willy nilly could spell doom... Why is Luke special? make his creation special if u can... They seem to be in WWii Europe BUT there is a problem there is Luke an axis or allie it will matter in the story to him for a time... Also Geman Town really didnt have many German Soldiers in them as the German men were almost all on a front line somewhere else.... if there ar e german soldiers there then you are in an occupied town in a another country and therefor they are killing innocent bystandars.. if thats yer intent fine if not realize that.... the only time nazis were in german towns is when they were pushed back during the end /last half of the war..... ok the rest of the story luke meeting millie is ok but pat..... Im not keen on the prego vamp baby idea but not my story... all i can say is undead...also realize during sex blood is sometimes mingled IE sexual disiese i wonder sometimes if that would make a vampire..... justa thought